Iowa Writes--Student Edition

TANNER KING
Excerpt from Running Commentary


Cameron walks into the lobby of the ER.  The doctor is waiting for him.  "Hi, I'm Dr. Tye. Please, come this way."
         He leads Cameron and his parents to an examination room.
         "Let me read off what's on here. It says here that Cameron smoked marijuana with some friends and had an adverse reaction.  It included hearing voices, extreme paranoia, loss of memory, and some possible religious delusions."
         "The memories are kind of starting to come back, now," Cameron says.  "I remember being in the woods...  There were shadow people running all around me."
         "So, some hallucinations as well," the doctor says.  "Well, Cameron, it seems to me like you had a psychotic reaction to marijuana.  It doesn't happen to many people, but for some, either because of a dormant mental disorder or a genetic predisposition, marijuana can cause what's called a psychotic break." He swivels in his chair to face Cameron's parents, Tim and Sherri.  "Do you have a history of mental illness in your family?"

Cameron walks into the lobby of the ER.  The doctor is waiting for him.  "Hi, I'm Dr. Tye. Please, come this way."
         He leads Cameron and his parents to an examination room.
         "Let me read off what's on here. It says here that Cameron smoked marijuana with some friends and had an adverse reaction.  It included hearing voices, extreme paranoia, loss of memory, and some possible religious delusions."
         "The memories are kind of starting to come back, now," Cameron says.  "I remember being in the woods...  There were shadow people running all around me."
         "So, some hallucinations as well," the doctor says.  "Well, Cameron, it seems to me like you had a psychotic reaction to marijuana.  It doesn't happen to many people, but for some, either because of a dormant mental disorder or a genetic predisposition, marijuana can cause what's called a psychotic break." He swivels in his chair to face Cameron's parents, Tim and Sherri.  "Do you have a history of mental illness in your family?"
         "My mom," Tim responds.  "She was schizoaffective..."
         "Okay, so we have some general idea of what happened," the doctor says.  "Is there still anything going on?"
         "I hear a voice."
         "What kinds of things does it say?"
         "It just says what's going on.  Like it's narrating a story."
         "That sounds like what's called a running commentary.  Some people with psychosis will hear a voice that narrates things.  Things they do, say, stuff like that."
         "It says everything.  I can hardly listen to you right now because it repeats everything you say, as you say it."
         Dr. Tye nods in an understanding way.  "Cameron, it's going to take more psychological testing to figure out exactly what happened to you, and if you're going to need further care.  For now, I'm just going to give you some antipsychotics."  He jots something down on a slip of paper.  "Here, take this to the pharmacy down the hall."
         Cameron gets up from his seat and exits the room with his parents.  He is calm, seemingly calm; his face is blank.
         They make their way down the bright white hallway to the pharmacy desk.  The woman behind the counter hands him a bottle of small white pills that do nothing. "There's a drinking fountain down the hall and to the right."  She hands him a paper cup.
         Cameron walks down the hallway, determination in his...  please stop.  You don't have to do this.  Stop! We can work something out! I'll only talk on week days! Dump that out! DUMP IT OUT NOW!
         CAMERON FINISHES FILLING HIS STUPID CUP WITH DUMB WATER AND HANDS IT TO HIS UGLY MOM SO HE CAN GET HIS DUMB PILLS THAT AREN'T GOING TO DO ANYTHING THEY'RE NOT GONNA DO ANYTHING DON'T EVEN TRY IT'S A WASTE OF TIME THEY'LL BREAK YOUR BRAIN THEY'RE MIND CONTROL PUT THEM DOWN THE DOCTOR IS TRYING TO POISON YOU HE IS IN ON THE PLOT I WILL KILL YOUR FAMILY SPIT IT OUT SPIT THAT PILL OUT THROW IT UP STICK YOUR FINGER IN YOUR BIG UGLY MOUTH DOWN YOUR THROAT AND THROW THEM UP RIGHT NOW YOU WILL NEVER BE ANYTHING EVERYONE HATES YOU!
         Hey.
         What?
         I'm going to kill you.
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TANNER KING

Tanner King is a student at the University of Iowa.  He is majoring in sociology, and writes for fun.  His writing can be found on Scribd under the username TannerKing.

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